[OC] Venus
She could make the night moan.
The darkest hour lies
before the sunrise.
Don't shake her,
She'll awaken
on her own.
...
One day she realises
The phoenix has to burn
before it rises.
Don't shake her,
She'll awaken
on her own.
She could make the night moan.
The darkest hour lies
before the sunrise.
Don't shake her,
She'll awaken
on her own.
...
One day she realises
The phoenix has to burn
before it rises.
Don't shake her,
She'll awaken
on her own.
Scaldart, Ooh! That refrain is eerie! I like it a lot! And I think the rhyming pattern is just mismatched enough to keep things flowing without feeling stale. This is good!
Spitz, Thank you! The rhyming pattern is supposed to communicate (subtly) the changes in her life that allow her to "rise". Also to change the flow and not make it boring. I'm glad you like it!
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