NaraMoore, (edited )
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Chapter 24 is finally ready to sit and get a last edit.

I ignored a couple of Beta readers suggestions, but one they didn't think was big gave me a hard time.

Characters were reacting to the tone of something I had in my head, not what was on paper. What I had on paper was right, not what was in my head. to rip out the transition both in and out of that section so people were reacting appropriately. It meant junking some nice dialog, but oh well.

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