[PI] Describe a magical object that grants its owner one wish

We’ve heard of jinns in bottles and hidden in mysterious places, but with the internet boom, this one jinn felt like a boomer, and even more so, she was bored. She went on the internet and learned everything there was to learn. “To overcome this boredom I need more people finding me and making wishes” she thought.

She infused her soul into a URL, that’s right, a URL, she was a freaking genius. The URL she chose was boogle.com, she wanted to grant wishes of the poor souls who made a typo while trying to access google.

She underestimated how many people would type boogle instead of google. And so it followed, thousands of people landing on boogle.com and making one wish as per her rules. She was shocked to see how mean, greedy and selfish the people can be. Everyone wanted money, power, looks, fame, attention etc etc.

Her boredom was sated pretty soon, and “never again” she thought.

Just when Emily landed on boogle.com. Emily was 13 and living in an orphanage. She had her first period yesterday. Had she had a mother, she would have answered all her questions about periods. But she had to rely on google to answer her infinite questions, that the caretakers won’t bother to answer.

The Jinn appeared in front of Emily, and repeated “You can make one wish…” for the thousandth time. Emily started crying and for the first time the jinn paid attention, she cared for the first time in centuries. Without even wishing, jinn made her pain go away. And once Emily calmed down, they talked for hours, jinn felt as if she hadn’t talked to someone since forever. They laughed and laughed and for the first time ever Jinn didn’t see an owner in front of her, but a child, even her own child. To her if felt as if her wish was granted instead.

She left boogle in an instance, and infused her soul into Emily’s heart, fulfilling here every wish forever without Emily ever asking.


Thank you for reading. I am new to writing, any advice and feedback is really appreciated.

streetfestival,
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I like it, well done! Maybe one way to improve it might be to make the jinn’s (or genie’s) motivations more consistent or connected throughout. The first 2 paragraphs could set up the human connection at the end more, or the end could feature more boogle or other ideas from the beginning to tie it together a bit more. I enjoyed reading it :)

densetrees,

Thank you, great advice, I’ll keep this in mind

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