Awkwardly_Frank

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Awkwardly_Frank,

Remember kids, according to an FAA review of accidents, no type of water ditching has lower than an eighty percent survivability rating. So putting it in the drink is always an option.

Awkwardly_Frank,

Election results always seem to mean exactly what the person writing about them has been telling everyone for years. Funny that.

Court upholds New York law that says ISPs must offer $15 broadband (arstechnica.com)

Trade groups claimed the state law is preempted by former Federal Communications Commission Chairman Ajit Pai’s repeal of net neutrality rules. Pai’s repeal placed ISPs under the more forgiving Title I regulatory framework instead of the common-carrier framework in Title II of the Communications Act. 2nd Circuit judges did...

Awkwardly_Frank,

Several of the trade groups that sued New York “vociferously lobbied the FCC to classify broadband Internet as a Title I service in order to prevent the FCC from having the authority to regulate them,” today’s 2nd Circuit ruling said. “At that time, Supreme Court precedent was already clear that when a federal agency lacks the power to regulate, it also lacks the power to preempt. The Plaintiffs now ask us to save them from the foreseeable legal consequences of their own strategic decisions. We cannot.”

This has to be one of the better, legal “go fuck yourselves” I’ve ever seen.

Awkwardly_Frank,

Isn’t this just the story of the allied powers in World War Two repackaged into science fiction? The members were:

The British who were sort of friends with the Americans but regarded them as less civilized and less experienced in running a nation.

The French who literally fought the Hundred Years’ War against the English.

The Soviets who didn’t like any of those people and proceeded to argue with all of them thereafter.

The Americans who had existed for a little over a century, invented the nuke after winning a fight with a World power in an ascendant phase, and decided it was on them to guarantee World peace.

The myth of being 'non-political' (farrellperks.substack.com)

Something I hear commonly when talking to people, is the dreaded phrase “I’m non-political”. Usually said to mean that they either don’t know, care, or understand politics. It’s likely true that a lot of these people don’t understand or know about the intricacies of politics in the UK, but it’s usually a complete...

Awkwardly_Frank,

I love the topic, and the passion, but if you’re looking for constructive criticism I personally feel that this piece could benefit greatly from a few academic sources and a little reorganization.

On the whole the article is focusing on voter apathy, of which the statement “I’m non-political” is a symptom. Try to focus more on the subject of voter apathy and less on the particular statement. The statement is fine for a headline and an intro but as another commenter has already noted there are other reasons individuals might attest to apolitical feelings. If you reference a study on voter apathy in your introductory paragraph you can pick out the leading causes or use a few of the findings of the study to structure the rest of your article. Focus each section on one cause or finding with references back to the original source and another work or two that are focused more specifically on that subject. This will lengthen the article and lend it more true substance.

Consider combining the what can be done and where to look sections into your summation. As the purpose of this piece is to examine a social ill it is ideally suited to a “call to action” summary and these are the perfect sections for it.

Lastly, you would do well to cut down on “I” statements. They rarely engage the reader and can feel out of place when writing about a subject as universal and academic as voter apathy. For your opener think about something along the lines of “How many times has this happened to you: You’re discussing the events of the day with a friend or acquaintance only to get into the meat of the discussion and suddenly be met with the phrase ‘I’m not political’…” It directly engages the reader by asking them to participate in the thought exercise and makes the anecdote personal instead of second-hand.

I hope any of this helps. I think you’ve got a good start here and I look forward to what it could be with a little more meat on its bones.

Awkwardly_Frank,

I think you’ve got the wrong type of Goths for that last one.

Awkwardly_Frank,

The Free Beacon is a rag. All of the charges they are talking about are their own. The article focuses on only one of the charges as it’s the only one not already specifically addressed by a plagiarism investigation sparked by their own charges. That one instance seems to center around two paragraphs and two footnotes. Only one of the paragraphs is more than one sentence long and all of them are descriptions of the contents of sections of the voting rights act. It would be pretty tough to reword that content in too many ways. Oh, and the article straight up admits that the author she supposedly plagiarized looked over the sections and told them that they come nowhere near academic plagiarism. There, now no one else needs to read that substance-less dreck.

Oh, and weren’t The Free Beacon the ones who funded Fusion GPS opo until the Steele dossier came out and they decided to trash fusion without ever telling anyone they were the ones funding them?

Awkwardly_Frank,

My reminder went off while I was at training for work! It’s just text and I admit I was so focused on work that it took me a while to remember what the hell it was on about.

Awkwardly_Frank,

So the company selling bogus aircraft parts is called AOG (Aircraft on Ground)?

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