NiklzNDimz,
@NiklzNDimz@beehaw.org avatar

Paragraph #4: Too long with a lot of flip-flop between the author’s stance on digital format and the need for physical. Be confident here and focus on the important part by eliminating the caveats and the “need to cover all the bases”. Once that’s done, this will be a powerful, concise message.

I like where you’re going with this and heartily agree!

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