It’s obviously pretty novice, and the subject matter is r o u g h, but I don’t think it’s bad. Needs more art to it, but I think it’ll evolve.
Just sprang out of my head while I was in the shower and I scribbled it down while it was fresh. Never happened to me before.
DarkNightoftheSoul, 
“mother bug”
it’s good.
edit: the poem, not the subject matter.
BonesOfTheMoon, Thank you!
shinigamiookamiryuu, What kind of poem was it? You can share it here if you’d like.
BonesOfTheMoon, Ok. Hope it’s not too trite.
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shinigamiookamiryuu, Oh it’s the free verse kind. I don’t think it’s bad. A good poem (of any kind; I specialize in sestinas for example) is one you can feel, and I could relate to the vibes.
BonesOfTheMoon, Thanks!
shinigamiookamiryuu, Is this your first one?
BonesOfTheMoon, Yes it is!
orangeNgreen, 
Great! I’m not much of a poet, but I can imagine it’s a great creative outlet.
BonesOfTheMoon, I love reading poetry and am most of c/poetry, but didn’t think to try my hand at it. Nice to do something creative.
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