KurtHohmann, 6 months ago #WritersCoffeeClub 3 "Are dialogue tags flexible?" laughed John. I have been accused of not using enough dialog tags. Consider the following snippet: "Damn." Matt stared up at the rafters overhead. "Isn't this the same place they shot Evil Dead?" "That one was a lot bigger." Al snorted. "And better decorated." He turned to the entrance. "What say we grab our stuff?" "Okay, but first, where's the loo?" Rachel shifted back and forth from one foot to the other. "I really do need to go."
#WritersCoffeeClub 3 "Are dialogue tags flexible?" laughed John.
I have been accused of not using enough dialog tags. Consider the following snippet:
"Damn." Matt stared up at the rafters overhead. "Isn't this the same place they shot Evil Dead?"
"That one was a lot bigger." Al snorted. "And better decorated." He turned to the entrance. "What say we grab our stuff?"
"Okay, but first, where's the loo?" Rachel shifted back and forth from one foot to the other. "I really do need to go."
Firlefanz, 6 months ago @KurtHohmann That's perfectly fine. I would be slightly bothered by having three paragraphs with the same structure (having an action identifying the speaker between lines of dialog), but it's a good way to avoid dialog tags. I usually do it in a similar way.
@KurtHohmann
That's perfectly fine.
I would be slightly bothered by having three paragraphs with the same structure (having an action identifying the speaker between lines of dialog), but it's a good way to avoid dialog tags.
I usually do it in a similar way.
KurtHohmann, 6 months ago @Firlefanz Thank you! I have certainly been guilty of using the same structure too many times in a row; I'm trying to get better about that.
@Firlefanz Thank you! I have certainly been guilty of using the same structure too many times in a row; I'm trying to get better about that.
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